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My loneliness is a cell
It's my imaginary hell
A fortress I built within
There are no doors
Just caged windows
Metal bars & self inflicted scars


I'm believing things that are not real
I gaze to what it is I long for
The entirety of what I'll never have
Envious of the air, pure, without care
See the nothing, and dream of me there


The veins of Insanity
Wrap like vines spiraling
Down and through-out my body
Tight at the neck
I turn blue, the color of serenity
If only you knew the force of this deception
The grasp of this torment draining my ghost


Thorns grow on every wound
My tongue galls at every vision
Hate provided me with a mirror
I'm left glaring, disgusted
I felt the impulse to murder
Only myself, only myself


I won't wake up
Unable to leave this prison
Locked from the inside out
As If Satan stole the key and swallowed it right in front of me
I feel acceptance among my decay here, rotting away
Slowly descending beneath the forbidden place




- Written by Sarah Ashleigh
Okay, well. This is my first time showing anyone my writings, I finally got the guts to post one.
I'm really not very good- but I put a lot of effort into this.
Basically this is a reflection of my thoughts, and how I feel at times, etc.


Anyways, please do say if you have any opinions.
I'd love to read them, good or bad. Any feedback is appreciated. :)
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3rdeye88 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I really feel myself relating to this. I feel very much the same way, rotting away in a self made prison. I think you would like some of my written work I've done a while back. I've strayed away from the poetic stuff cause it got to a point where I was just repeating myself, but when we can chat I'd like to show you some of my work, or go take a look yourself. :)
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BlueMercury13 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! This is amazing. I love it.

Great job! :)
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Dark-and-Dreamless Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011
Aw, thank you.
I'm so glad you love it. :aww:
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Artofthebeholder Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2011
This is very touching & beautiful, I applaud your bravery for posting your work, I know it can be an intimidating endeavor to want to share written work with the world! You have a remarkable talent, the flow & composition of this piece is so well done, it's masterful.
I love the content of this piece as well, the deep dark places within our minds, the things we lock away, the horrible memories we block out. It's very relate-able, I think everyone has a dark part of themselves.
I really like this piece, I look forward to seeing more from you, you really should give yourself more credit, you have real ability. Plus self-depreciation isn't a good color on anyone. :heart:
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Dark-and-Dreamless Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011
Wow, thank you.
I've never had anyone say that anything I've done is "masterful" or "remarkable"..
So you truly made my day. That genuinely means a lot to me.
Cause.. I mean.. like you said, it's intimidating..
It's not easy to share my thoughts, whether it's verbally or this..
I'm naturally pretty rough on myself. Although, I'm really grateful for
the encouragement I've been getting from people lately with everything I've involved myself in artistically.
It helps so much. I try to put my heart into everything I create.

.. And I agree with you, everyone has a darker side to them.
Which I find to be one of the most interesting things about people.
I've always kind of just lived in my head. Which is evident, haha.


But, I really cherish your words. :heart:
I'll have to find the time to finish some other stuff I have lingering in my notebooks. :)
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Artofthebeholder Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011
I'm really happy to hear that my comments have made you so happy! =) My intention is always to be honest & heartfelt :heart: Since I've been on DA I've always received a ton of support. I really love this site above all others because the vast majority of people on here are really just very genuine, kind & helpful! Whenever I problem, whenever I join a group, whenever I new deviations- people are always so nice!

For sure you should try and pick up some of your lingering pieces, I've found a lot of the time when I have an unfinished poem, if I come back to it later (later being a month or so) I'll usually scrap the whole & start over using the same concept & story but just trying a different rhyme & rhythm. =)
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Very nicely written, you should have more faith in the words you write :] They tell a unique story :)
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Dark-and-Dreamless Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011
You're so nice, thank you.
I'll try to have more faith. :hug:
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You're welcome :]
You do that :aww:
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avina77 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011
ya hey i feel for your writing you are very talented and i cant wait to see what else you post
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